Shadow Curse
Lisa motioned for him to enter.
The putrid stench of the filthy demon filled my lungs when I sucked in a deep breath. I tried to shout a warning, but the words caught in my throat.
Patches of scraggly black hair stuck out of the rotting flesh that covered his body. Scabs flaked off and fell to the floor as he walked to the center of the room. His blood filled eyes held me with a piercing glare.
“Lisa.” I reached for her. “Go in the bathroom and lock the door.”
“What’s wrong?” She grabbed my hand.
“Don’t you know who that is?”
“Yes.” Her tone contained only a hint of concern. “I know who he is.”
“Get out of here, Lisa.”
“No. You get out.” The demon’s voice boomed in my ears. His gnarled, bony hand wrapped around Lisa’s arm. His other back–handed me across the face.
The force of the blow lifted me from the floor and flung me against the wall. My body crumpled onto the rug. Blackness crept into the edges of my vision.
“Brendon!” Lisa’s screams filled the air.
25 comments:
Oh man that demon totally grossed me out! Great job:)
Very vivid! I could picture it all just like watching a movie! Well done!
Ohhh mysterious and evil at the same time! Loved it!
Thanks for the encouragement. Shadow Curse is the 2nd in my Shadow series. The first book in the series, Shadow Keeper is already published.
Poor Brendon! Interesting flash! I like the description.
Thanks, Sonia. Glad you like it.
Hmmm!!
Kind of interesting!!
with warm regards
Another Author
Thanks, guys. Glad you liked it.
Wow, great description through this!
Why was Lisa so calm about it...until the end? Intriguing.
Thanks, Tara. Lisa is calm because the demon has taken over the body of a person she knows, but she doesn't know he's possessed; only Brendon knows.
Yikes that sounds spooky! Great piece I can really picture the freaky demon!
I love your reactions. I wanted to spook people out with the demon, so I guess I accomplished my goal.
Whoa! What the demon! I quite enjoyed this bit of writing. Excellent picture you set up.
Great job, Marilyn! :)
Thanks, David. I wish I could've used another 200 words to set it up more.
I want to know more about the relationship between the three of them. interesting though. mine is#72
Sorry, Bridget, but you'll have to wait another couple months for Shadow Curse to be published. Then you can see the relationship with the three of them.
Great twist! It totally caught me off guard that Lisa thought the demon was a normal person. And what an intensely creepy description of the demon - great job, friend!
P.S. Brendon BETTER be okay. You hear me Marilyn?!!! Blast it- now you've got me caring and it just a few words!
Don't worry, Brendon and Lisa will live--they have to since they are the main characters in the 3rd and final book of my Shadow series.
P.S. Glad you liked it, Brenda.
And? AND?! *squinty eyes* Grr...
Great use of smell and sound. Nice and dark snippet.
Thanks. I like when people want more. And I always try to engage all the senses with my writing.
I like the excerpt from Shadow Keeper as well. Good spooky stuff! Thanks for stopping by my blog on the Campaign trail. (Write Like a Pro! at http://chriseboch.blogspot.com/)
Thanks, Chris. Glad you like it.
Well done! Very vivid...and gross I might add.
Stobby
Thanks, N.Scott. I didn't mean to gross you out--wait a minute, yes I did.
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